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English term or phrase:
a sentence.
English answer:
A clearer version
- The asker opted for community grading. The question was closed on 2009-12-16 15:58:51 based on peer agreement (or, if there were too few peer comments, asker preference.)
Dec 13, 2009 08:27
14 yrs ago
English term
a sentence.
English
Social Sciences
Law (general)
o During the au pair placement follow training courses in a recognized institution, recognized or subsidized by one of the Communities or determined by the District Minister who has the employment under his authority and that teaches the district language or languages whose knowledge he is coming to perfect by presenting proof every trimester to show that he follows these lessons regularly.
I am a little confused about this sentence. "his" seems to refer to the district minister while "he" seems to refer to the au-pair youth.
Can somebody rewrite this sentence for me? Thanks.
I am a little confused about this sentence. "his" seems to refer to the district minister while "he" seems to refer to the au-pair youth.
Can somebody rewrite this sentence for me? Thanks.
Responses
| 5 +4 | A clearer version |
Sheila Wilson
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| 3 +3 | I would just amend the punctuation |
Jack Doughty
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+4
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Sheila Wilson
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A clearer version
During the au pair placement, the au pair should follow training courses in a recognized institution (recognized or subsidized by one of the Communities or determined by the District Minister who has the employment under his authority), which teaches the district language or languages whose knowledge the au pair is coming to perfect. The au pair should present proof every trimester to show that he is following these lessons regularly.
Even then, it's not how I'd write it, but I think it's clearer. The original style is confusing and rambling, with two areas that simply don't make sense as written.
Even then, it's not how I'd write it, but I think it's clearer. The original style is confusing and rambling, with two areas that simply don't make sense as written.
Note from asker:
| Hi Sheila, I want to give you 5 points, but I am unable to do it due to the configuration of this question. This answer is exactly what I want. |
| Sheila, is District Minister equal to Head of District? |
Peer comment(s):
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Jack Doughty
: I think that's probably easier to understand than my answer.
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Thanks, Jack. A horrible piece of writing, especially considering the subject matter!
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eski
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Thanks
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George C.
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Thanks
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Tina Vonhof (X)
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Thanks
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4 KudoZ points awarded for this answer.
Comment: "This is what I need. Thanks Sheila."
+3
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Jack Doughty
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I would just amend the punctuation
During the au pair placement follow training courses in an institution recognized or subsidized by one of the Communities, or determined by the District Minister who has the employment under his authority, and that teaches the district language or languages whose knowledge he is coming to perfect, by presenting proof every trimester to show that he follows these lessons regularly.
You are right in your assumption about "his and "he". I think this is a bit clearer in my version.
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Note added at 6 hrs (2009-12-13 14:49:07 GMT)
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The District Minister determines, i.e. rules that a certain institution falls within these rules.
The District Minister who is responsible for employment in au par placements.
No, the District Minister does not teach the language, the institution teaches the language.
You are right in your assumption about "his and "he". I think this is a bit clearer in my version.
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Note added at 6 hrs (2009-12-13 14:49:07 GMT)
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The District Minister determines, i.e. rules that a certain institution falls within these rules.
The District Minister who is responsible for employment in au par placements.
No, the District Minister does not teach the language, the institution teaches the language.
Peer comment(s):
| agree |
Rolf Keiser
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Thank you.
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kolya
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Thank you.
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British Diana
: yes, but can you explain where "follow" fits? is it an imperative?
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Seems to be something missing. During the au pair placement, the student should follow…
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Discussion
what is determined by the district minister? the training courses or the institution?
What does "has the employment under his authority" mean?
The district minister also teaches the district language?