Jumbled sentences (May 13, 2011) Thread poster: RominaZ
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RominaZ 
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Can you put this sentences in order? No peeking or surfing the Internet!
1.- Visualizing - achievements - towards - can- reaching -contribute - one's -one's -effectively - objectives
2.- vividness - back - her - memories - haunting - her - childhood - with - came - to - early - of
3.- say -wish - I - were - less - circumstances - must - the - difficult - I
Have fun!
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1. Visualizing one's achievements can effectively contribute towards reaching one's objectives.
2. Early memories of childhood came back to her haunting her with vividness.
3. I must say I wish the circumstances were less difficult.
(Sorry, made a mistake. I hope I did not correct it after somebody else's correct answers!)
[Edited at 2011-05-13 17:02 GMT]
| | | | RominaZ
Argentina
English to Spanish
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TOPIC STARTER | You nailed it, Tomás! | May 13, 2011 |
Hi Tomás,
Well done! Now sentence 2 can be ordered in other two different ways (apart from yours) and still be grammatically correct. Anyone else willing to give it a try?
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Tomás Cano Binder, CT wrote:
2. Early memories of childhood came back to her haunting her with vividness.
I think this is more likely
Memories of her early childhood came back to haunting her with vividness.
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Lingua 5B
Bosnia and Herzegovina
Local time: 18:49
Member (2009)
English to Croatian
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| "to haunting" | May 13, 2011 |
Ambrose Li wrote:
I think this is more likely
Memories of her early childhood came back to haunting her with vividness.
This doesn't sound right to me, this gerund doesn't quite collocate with "to".
My paraphrase of Tomas' sentence is:
Early memories of her childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
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Lingua 5B wrote:
Early memories of her childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
Indeed. And it sounds far more terrible than my wording of it. Poor woman!
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Bosnia and Herzegovina
Local time: 18:49
Member (2009)
English to Croatian
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| Different connotation | May 13, 2011 |
Tomás Cano Binder, CT wrote: Lingua 5B wrote:
Early memories of her childhood came back to her with haunting vividness. Indeed. And it sounds far more terrible than my wording of it. Poor woman!
Yes, it gives a different connotation, surely. We don't have any insight into the preceding context, so it's pretty much free style rewriting. But it ultimately depends on what effect a writer wants to evoke in the reader.
Also, taking a look at the phrase:
Early memories of her childhood
There are variations to it:
Her early childhood memories ( what does early refer to, childhood or memories?):
Memories of her early childhood
or
Early memories of her childhood
?
[Edited at 2011-05-13 21:59 GMT]
| | | | RominaZ
Argentina
English to Spanish
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TOPIC STARTER | That's right! And there are at least two more possibilities | May 14, 2011 |
Hi Lingua 5B,
Lingua 5B wrote:
My paraphrase of Tomas' sentence is:
Early memories of her childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
Good one! There are at least two more possibilities:
Memories of her early childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
Update: I see you got this one, too, Lingua 5B
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Haunting memories of her early childhood came back to her with vividness.
To tell you the truth I was not expecting so many possible solutions.
Good job!
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Phil Hand
China
Local time: 00:49
Chinese to English
| There are a lot of possibilities | May 14, 2011 |
Words can be arranged however we want them. Some of the versions below are a bit unlikely, pragmatically, but they're all possible, and there are definitely more.
Visualizing - achievements - towards - can- reaching -contribute - one's -one's -effectively - objectives
Visualizing one's achievements can contribute towards effectively reaching one's objectives.
Visualizing one's achievements can effectively contribute towards reaching one's objectives.
Effect... See more Words can be arranged however we want them. Some of the versions below are a bit unlikely, pragmatically, but they're all possible, and there are definitely more.
Visualizing - achievements - towards - can- reaching -contribute - one's -one's -effectively - objectives
Visualizing one's achievements can contribute towards effectively reaching one's objectives.
Visualizing one's achievements can effectively contribute towards reaching one's objectives.
Effectively visualizing one's achievements can contribute towards reaching one's objectives.
Visualizing reaching one's objectives can effectively contribute towards one's achievements.
Effectively visualizing reaching one's objectives can contribute towards one's achievements.
Visualizing effectively reaching one's objectives can contribute towards one's achievements.
One's achievements can contribute towards effectively visualizing reaching one's objectives.
One's achievements can contribute towards visualizing effectively reaching one's objectives.
Visualizing one's achievements can contribute towards one's reaching objectives effectively.
Visualizing one's achievements can contribute towards one's effectively reaching objectives.
vividness - back - her - memories - haunting - her - childhood - with - came - to - early - of
Memories of her early childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
Early memories of her childhood came back to her with haunting vividness.
Haunting memories of her early childhood came back to her with vividness.
Haunting early memories of her childhood came back to her with vividness.
Her childhood came back to her with early memories of haunting vividness.
Her vividness came back to her with haunting memories of early childhood.
Edit: here's another one with a rather different meaning!
Her vividness came back to her with memories of early childhood haunting.
say -wish - I - were - less - circumstances - must - the - difficult - I
I must say I wish the circumstances were less difficult.
I wish the circumstances were less difficult, I must say.
I must say I wish the difficult circumstances were less.
[Edited at 2011-05-14 03:46 GMT] ▲ Collapse
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